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know the devil will cry
when I'm before his eye
the reformed demon
with angels at my side
now unable to abide
laws from heaven or hell

was legendary
in hell's military
now the adversary
to Satan's emissary
fight is necessary
its not arbitrary

the tears from his eyes
will flow as blood from his sides
from heavenly blades
this fateful demonic raid
devil's destruction
my image of reconstruction
do i choose right or might?...
©2008-2009 ~MasterRoller720
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Submitted: January 11, 2008
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well, i finished it but i'm still not entirely happy. i might change it later. but i do want to keep the number of lines the same, the 6-6-7 thing. I'm really hoping for some good criticism on this one, thanks

Edit: freaky, but i just realized this file size is 666 bytes... pretty gnarly huh?
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what criticism? i like it... the third came out much better this time. this is a good improvement.
thanks :-D as for the criticism, i always like hearing people thoughts on it, good or bad.

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"I've been bitten by ghost, slapped by vampires and haunted by mole rats, i think i deserve a free hot dog"
love it man... i feel like it has tons of character in the rythm of the syllabls

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crack my head open on your kitchen floor
to prove to you that i have brains
Hey crazy very nice. I like that a lot. It's got a flow and a good cadence.

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Some mornings it just isn't worth chewing through the leather straps...

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